Drafts Are Back: Back Again!

I'm actually writing this blog post in my English class right now, which is a first for me. We just exchanged our feedback on each others essays and read over them. First off, I thought it was mere coincidence when I learned that the person's essay I responded to was the same one that responded to my essay. However, as I soon found out, Professor Scott had done the same thing with everybody else in the class. As far as the response goes, it was more or less what I expected.
For my research this semester I have been looking at the Virginia Tech Community and what sets it apart from other college communities. However, one of the things I learned long ago was that it always important to know both sides of what you are trying to argue. I saw the essay as my ability to do just that. The main idea of my essay was to present my frustrations at Tech in order to show the school in a less than pleasing light. I weaved my thoughts into my own personal story of how I got a judicial review (J.R.).
I believe Emily did a great job analyzing my essay seeing that it wasn't completed. She described my larger theme as "something like getting in trouble for something, while in the act, you would have never expected to get in trouble for, but when thinking back realizing it was technically breaking rules". While I definitely can agree with that statement, it ultimately wasn't what I was trying to say. In all fairness to Emily, though, the main reason she wasn't able to pick up my message was because I hadn't yet fit my story into the larger context of Virginia Tech. I had talked a little about my successful moments in my first months at Tech but I hadn't yet contrasted it with the frustrations that overwhelmed me after getting the J.R. What was really great about Emily's feedback was that she seemed to enjoy the personal story setting and the "coffee shop conversation" feel, which was exactly what I was aiming for. It makes me more confident that I will be able to draw in and maintain the attention of my readers.